Story/essay Pointer

[rps]

I just posted a story/essay to my OAF blog. Any suggestions to make a better story would be very welcome.

rps

[zander]

wow. I am not the best writer or literary critic. I can say that I liked the realization that you came to at the end of the story. The whole time reading the story I was thinking I was going to read about a car wreck you or one of your fmaily would be involved on on Lewis, so when the end of the story came, it was a surprise for me. Good story, and obviously very personal as well. It takes guts to write about painful stuff like that.